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[td]*** So, what I would do first is paraphrase those quotations. This will make the writing tighter and more straightforward. Remember to quote sparingly; do this only when someone says something memorable/impactful but paraphrasing their words would remove the oomph.[/td] [td]*** Furthermore, you can follow the new opening sentence by writing about how the folks behind the film wanted to subvert audience expectations and bring something new to the franchise via the characters. "{{tq|The screenwriters behind the sixth film, ''[[Final Destination Bloodlines]]'', wanted to subvert audience expectations surrounding the characters}}". Then, describe the premise of ''Bloodlines''. "{{tq|After [[Jon Watts]] decided that ''Bloodlines'' would revolve around a cursed family, whose members died based on lineage, X and Y writer wanted to create a plot twist that involved parentage}}".[/td]
[td]*** Furthermore, you can follow the new opening sentence by writing about how the folks behind the film wanted to subvert audience expectations and bring something new to the franchise via the characters. "{{tq|The screenwriters behind the sixth film, ''[[Final Destination Bloodlines]]'', wanted to subvert audience expectations surrounding the characters}}". Then, describe the premise of ''Bloodlines''. "{{tq|After [[Jon Watts]] decided that ''Bloodlines'' would revolve around a cursed family, whose members died based on lineage, X and Y writer wanted to create a plot twist that involved parentage}}".[/td] [td]Hey {{ping|PSA}} I'll be honest, I have a few objections with certain of the suggestions. For example, based on the sources, saying that "subverting expectations, particularly with the characters, was one of the big missions for the people behind ''Bloodlines''" isn't exactly accurate. The directors simply state "we wanted to play a lot with the structure of ''Final Destination''"; not that they were intentionally going out of their way to subvert the audiences' expectations. Also, the directors (or anybody else) never state that fans hated the characters in the previous films being assholes. That's why the phrase about "subverting expectations" is not used until the second paragraph; because that's the first time any of the sources actually mention one of the crew members wanting to do this with ''Bloodlines''. I'll make revisions to the first two paragraphs, and hopefully it will look better. But I do think it's best to state who wrote and directed ''Bloodlines'' early on, so I don't have to keep saying "X person who did Y thing on the film".--[[User
anagiotisZois|PanagiotisZois]] ([[User talkanagiotisZois|talk]]) 16:39, 3 September 2025 (UTC)[/td]
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[td]** With that, you've laid the foundation for talking about Erik, without the unnecessary "Bloodlines was directed by" stuff. Transition to the next paragraph, writing about how the BTS folk wanted to make Erik central to their "subvert expectations" plan. Describe the various ways they used him for twists and turns in the plot. Then, name those ways (the parlor fakeout, the half-blood reveal, etc). Once you've named those ways, that's when the article should reveal the alternate/scrapped ideas for his character.[/td]
[td]** With that, you've laid the foundation for talking about Erik, without the unnecessary "Bloodlines was directed by" stuff. Transition to the next paragraph, writing about how the BTS folk wanted to make Erik central to their "subvert expectations" plan. Describe the various ways they used him for twists and turns in the plot. Then, name those ways (the parlor fakeout, the half-blood reveal, etc). Once you've named those ways, that's when the article should reveal the alternate/scrapped ideas for his character.[/td] [td]*** Trim some of the clunky writing here. "{{tq|having one of the characters be revealed as not a blood relative of the Campbell family was an idea the production team had early into the making of Bloodlines}}" is one example; one of the suggested new sentences I proposed above could easily replace this. Another example would be "{{tq|it was decided to implement the idea of having a character's parentage be revealed as different than what the Campbells and the audience initially assumed}}". The part about the "{{tq|double kill}}" and "{{tq|double sequence}}" makes no sense and, unless you can find a good way to paraphrase it, you might as well cut it. Same goes for "{{tq|take the family structure and lean into family conflict}}" --- ask yourself "what is Craig trying to say here, and how would I tell this to another FD fan?" and you might have a good idea of how to reword the quotation.[/td]
[td]*** Trim some of the clunky writing here. "{{tq|having one of the characters be revealed as not a blood relative of the Campbell family was an idea the production team had early into the making of Bloodlines}}" is one example; one of the suggested new sentences I proposed above could easily replace this. Another example would be "{{tq|it was decided to implement the idea of having a character's parentage be revealed as different than what the Campbells and the audience initially assumed}}". The part about the "{{tq|double kill}}" and "{{tq|double sequence}}" makes no sense and, unless you can find a good way to paraphrase it, you might as well cut it. Same goes for "{{tq|take the family structure and lean into family conflict}}" --- ask yourself "what is Craig trying to say here, and how would I tell this to another FD fan?" and you might have a good idea of how to reword the quotation.[/td]
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[td]*** So, what I would do first is paraphrase those quotations. This will make the writing tighter and more straightforward. Remember to quote sparingly; do this only when someone says something memorable/impactful but paraphrasing their words would remove the oomph.[/td]Revision as of 16:39, 3 September 2025
[/td][td]*** So, what I would do first is paraphrase those quotations. This will make the writing tighter and more straightforward. Remember to quote sparingly; do this only when someone says something memorable/impactful but paraphrasing their words would remove the oomph.[/td] [td]*** Furthermore, you can follow the new opening sentence by writing about how the folks behind the film wanted to subvert audience expectations and bring something new to the franchise via the characters. "{{tq|The screenwriters behind the sixth film, ''[[Final Destination Bloodlines]]'', wanted to subvert audience expectations surrounding the characters}}". Then, describe the premise of ''Bloodlines''. "{{tq|After [[Jon Watts]] decided that ''Bloodlines'' would revolve around a cursed family, whose members died based on lineage, X and Y writer wanted to create a plot twist that involved parentage}}".[/td]
[td]*** Furthermore, you can follow the new opening sentence by writing about how the folks behind the film wanted to subvert audience expectations and bring something new to the franchise via the characters. "{{tq|The screenwriters behind the sixth film, ''[[Final Destination Bloodlines]]'', wanted to subvert audience expectations surrounding the characters}}". Then, describe the premise of ''Bloodlines''. "{{tq|After [[Jon Watts]] decided that ''Bloodlines'' would revolve around a cursed family, whose members died based on lineage, X and Y writer wanted to create a plot twist that involved parentage}}".[/td] [td]Hey {{ping|PSA}} I'll be honest, I have a few objections with certain of the suggestions. For example, based on the sources, saying that "subverting expectations, particularly with the characters, was one of the big missions for the people behind ''Bloodlines''" isn't exactly accurate. The directors simply state "we wanted to play a lot with the structure of ''Final Destination''"; not that they were intentionally going out of their way to subvert the audiences' expectations. Also, the directors (or anybody else) never state that fans hated the characters in the previous films being assholes. That's why the phrase about "subverting expectations" is not used until the second paragraph; because that's the first time any of the sources actually mention one of the crew members wanting to do this with ''Bloodlines''. I'll make revisions to the first two paragraphs, and hopefully it will look better. But I do think it's best to state who wrote and directed ''Bloodlines'' early on, so I don't have to keep saying "X person who did Y thing on the film".--[[User
anagiotisZois|PanagiotisZois]] ([[User talkanagiotisZois|talk]]) 16:39, 3 September 2025 (UTC)[/td]
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[td]** With that, you've laid the foundation for talking about Erik, without the unnecessary "Bloodlines was directed by" stuff. Transition to the next paragraph, writing about how the BTS folk wanted to make Erik central to their "subvert expectations" plan. Describe the various ways they used him for twists and turns in the plot. Then, name those ways (the parlor fakeout, the half-blood reveal, etc). Once you've named those ways, that's when the article should reveal the alternate/scrapped ideas for his character.[/td][td]** With that, you've laid the foundation for talking about Erik, without the unnecessary "Bloodlines was directed by" stuff. Transition to the next paragraph, writing about how the BTS folk wanted to make Erik central to their "subvert expectations" plan. Describe the various ways they used him for twists and turns in the plot. Then, name those ways (the parlor fakeout, the half-blood reveal, etc). Once you've named those ways, that's when the article should reveal the alternate/scrapped ideas for his character.[/td] [td]*** Trim some of the clunky writing here. "{{tq|having one of the characters be revealed as not a blood relative of the Campbell family was an idea the production team had early into the making of Bloodlines}}" is one example; one of the suggested new sentences I proposed above could easily replace this. Another example would be "{{tq|it was decided to implement the idea of having a character's parentage be revealed as different than what the Campbells and the audience initially assumed}}". The part about the "{{tq|double kill}}" and "{{tq|double sequence}}" makes no sense and, unless you can find a good way to paraphrase it, you might as well cut it. Same goes for "{{tq|take the family structure and lean into family conflict}}" --- ask yourself "what is Craig trying to say here, and how would I tell this to another FD fan?" and you might have a good idea of how to reword the quotation.[/td]
[td]*** Trim some of the clunky writing here. "{{tq|having one of the characters be revealed as not a blood relative of the Campbell family was an idea the production team had early into the making of Bloodlines}}" is one example; one of the suggested new sentences I proposed above could easily replace this. Another example would be "{{tq|it was decided to implement the idea of having a character's parentage be revealed as different than what the Campbells and the audience initially assumed}}". The part about the "{{tq|double kill}}" and "{{tq|double sequence}}" makes no sense and, unless you can find a good way to paraphrase it, you might as well cut it. Same goes for "{{tq|take the family structure and lean into family conflict}}" --- ask yourself "what is Craig trying to say here, and how would I tell this to another FD fan?" and you might have a good idea of how to reword the quotation.[/td]
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