Talk:Star Wars: Duel of the Fates/GA1

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:Brilliant – very much appreciated. Thank you — '''''[[User:ImaginesTigers|ImaginesTigers]]''''' ([[User talk:ImaginesTigers|talk]]) 16:11, 8 July 2025 (UTC)
:Brilliant – very much appreciated. Thank you — '''''[[User:ImaginesTigers|ImaginesTigers]]''''' ([[User talk:ImaginesTigers|talk]]) 16:11, 8 July 2025 (UTC)
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=== Prose and content ===
* {{green|Lucasfilm and Trevorrow parted ways citing creative differences}} This is
* Mention in the lead that the final film used a different script
* Structurally strange for an article about a script to have the discussion on writing in a background section.
* Introduce why we are talking about J.J. Abrams.
* {{green|answer to Rey's family}} Can you expand on what this means?
* {{green|Trevorrow said the critical response had been "more damaging" than the movie itself...}} I generally think this source can be better summarized.
* It feels strange that there's nothing on who leaked it or why.
* I think it's worth describing briefly how it is different from the released film.
* Generally a very good explanation of the plot. Some confusing bits:
** What is a Sith? Holocron? Bonadan? hyperdrive?
** {{green|using this power to kill Tor Valum}} Why?
** I think you can introduce a few characters a bit better, even if you think they're obvious such as Leia and Emperor Palpatine. You do a fine job with most with establishing them through context.
** Are life force and life energy different things?
** What is the significance of "Rey Solana"?
** {{green|As she nears death... [she is given] the choice to stay dead}} Contradictory here
* Have a scan through to see if there's any discrepancies with AmEng. For instance, you use rumours in one part, and rumored later.
* "retcon the parentage" [[Retroactive continuity]] is a good link here, but you can generally explain why this is significant.
* {{green|but he dies as a villain in Duel of the Fates but is redeemed in Abrams' movie}} Clunky, and in the plot section you say "In an act of redemption"
* {{green|Colin Trevorrow said he did not regret his work on Duel of the Fates...}} I think this sentence, particularly the "cited" description should be restructured to be more clear.
* "CinemaBlend about the fan-made comic." Something's been lost here.
* "Ryan Britt wrote positively Winegarner's comic" Here as well.
* "more serious version had been made by animated YouTube creator" And here.
* So, were these animation adaptations full adapations? Or just picking out scenes? A bit confused.

=== Suggestions ===
* I think the guidance in [[User:Tony1/Noun plus -ing]] can be applied to {{green|In January 2020, the script was posted to social media, with some critics describing it as too professional to be fan fiction.}}
* "note/d" is used repetitively in the #Press section
* I think Boyega's criticisms of The Rise of Skywalker can be merged into a single sentence.
* [[Star Wars comics]] would be a better link for [[The Star Wars]]

=== Sources ===
* {{green|which released two months after his departure.}} Two months before.
* You put "side-lining" in quotes as if Boyega said it. The source doesn't verify this. Did he?

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